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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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Triumph He was a victim of a war, Not fought in trench or field, But waged within the people's minds And power they could yield. For every one who believed in Him, There were a hundred more, Who hated and despised Him for The purity He wore. They didn't want to hear the Truth. Were set in lawless ways. They sought only to destroy Him And end His blameless days. They didn't know that God ordained All things that happened then And though they killed the mortal Man, He would return again. His teachings grow in greater strength, As each year passes on And though He is not visible, His Presence isn't gone. Down through the centuries, He has been A triumph over death. He's the Right Hand of the Father, Who is our very Breath. Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very nice writing miss betty  i especially like those last 2 lines..hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Dear Betty. you have found yet another way to tell His story. Beautiful. Joyce |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ 'His teachings grow in greater strength, As each year passes on And though He is not visible, His Presence isn't gone.' And we each must keep teaching what we know of Him~ Singing His praises loud. This is a fervent reminder ~ Thank you for sharing your verse~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A very stirring Christ centered poem. Truly, reminds us where the battle lies and who will remain victorious at the end of our battles. You have portrayed Jesus very well in your poem. -Bob |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
dgvarner: Thank you for your comments. I'm glad you liked this poem. Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 09-02-2001).] |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Thank you Joyce: It's a challenge finding new ways to tell a story we are all so familiar with. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Marge: You're right! This is something we need to do every day and what a wonderful message it is to share. Thanks. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Bob: Thanks. Your comments are always appreciated. Betty Lou Hebert |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
It's beautiful! All your poetry is such a joy to read. I'm so happy you post in Spiritual. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Betty, this is wonderfully woven and the flow is impeccable but for one nit...I think the line near the end would have a more agreeable rhythm if you used He's instead of He has. Read it a few times and make sure it's not just my reading. It's just that ALL the rest of it seemed so very perfect that I couldn't help mentioning it. I love the line about Him being our very breath, especially! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
sandgrain: What a nice compliment and it's much appreciated. Thanks. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
VAS: You're absolutely right! Thanks for bringing it to my attention. I read it over several times before posting and never caught that error in meter. Really glad you told me about it and I've changed it. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
VAS: Just discovered that I can't change the error, as it is more than 24 hours since I posted the poem. I appreciate your critique however and will change it on my copies. Thanks. Betty Lou Hebert |
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