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Tangled Thoughts |
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huddersfield Junior Member
since 2003-12-29
Posts 25huddersfield, England |
Tangled thoughts, Mish mashed in a puzzle Compact so tight. That, as hard as I try, The solution seems to be Drawn into the centre By an iron grip, That grasps with the strength Of a thousand asps, With a bite to match, And a venom that intoxicates The senses with a plethora of Misjudgements, which guide my hand In tasks to no avail… Ive managed to write this so far, but i always seem to get stuck with how to end them... When i re read it over n over, it appears that it may not need anything more... maybe just editing a bit... Any help please  Thanks in advance Glynn |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
Nice job. I like the descriptions alot. good imagery. I don't think this needs much more work. |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
Nice job. I like the descriptions alot. good imagery. I don't think this needs much more work. |
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