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Critical Analysis #2

My first work

Dat
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since 2005-12-23

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0 posted 2005-12-23 08:28 AM

Hello!

What do you think of my first piece of work?

To flee is not surrendering.

Thanks

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03

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1 posted 2005-12-23 09:56 AM

Hello and welcome to CA.

Not much I can see to critique in this rahter minimalistic offering. It may be a bit grammatically jarring to match an infinitive with a gerund though.

Dat
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since 2005-12-23

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2 posted 2005-12-23 02:56 PM

Hello!

I like them short and clear.

Yes, it was the grammatic part I was after.
How would you phrase dat (i know it should be "that"

)?

Btw, since I just started I'm not sure but I thought that when writing poems the grammer could be wrong in that sense.

PS: English is not my native language.

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