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Critical Analysis #2
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Bill Shirnberg
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since 2007-10-28
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0 posted 2008-03-17 10:33 PM

This spins through the mantra's
of the wisdom's wise
all answers are questions
in disguise
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RCat
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since 2008-02-16
Posts 70
1 posted 2008-03-18 12:12 PM

Hey Bill, this immediately triggered a response within.  Just a little adaptation of your intonation:

spin the mantra wise
answer a question
in disguise―

ignorance
sows clever
lofted bribes

against the sea
unseen waves
rush too sure;

Karma beats its own path.

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Thanks for the ring tone!
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