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The True Eternal Fire
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The True Eternal Fire |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
The true eternal fire If I could say what I want, I’d voice my sacred view, Our love could be so pure and true, If you would love me to . High above the rooftops, Pages out of view, The music calls so loud, To me, So fair and good and true . So verse would let me talk to you, You’d understand my plight , Help me now to guide, Me through, My tough and struggled fight . Look down to the banks of the pure blue sea, Go way down through the tide, The beat will drive me right and good, On to the lighter side . And as the eternal fires burn, My flame just burns for you, It’s shining, burning, fresh, warm light, Is all that guides me through . This light I have is all I need, Eternal, strong and true, As my time just rolls away, Speeding out of view . I am forced to use my brain, That knows not what to do, The music comes, The music goes, My heart will guide me true . And as I look upon you now, I come to realise, This flame is strong in side of me, It knows not how to hide . So when I see a candle burn, I’ll always think of you, The one who lights the holy path, The song, So sweat and pure, And true . I shall hold your warmth to me, This chill I feel to, This cold will creep away from me, From fire, Love and you . As this ice just melts away, Tears run from my deepest eyes, So pure, So good, So fair, So right, I am happy, Now I’ll die . Written by Tom Baker . |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is very well put Tom...welcome to passions!!! You're very well off with your words!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Adriahh Junior Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 18 |
I wish I could be so honest with my words... enjoyed it Adria |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Beautiful poem, and welcome to passions! Did Jesus laugh? I think He did, 'cause He was once a little kid; and all of us were made with joy both sugar-spice girl and snake-snail boy! |
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Björn Junior Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 23Münster, Germany |
Hi angelswing! As a reply to my poem you said "If I could write like this I would be laughing" So please start now and don´t ever stop!! (Now it´s me who sits in awe and wishing I could write like this) |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Thanks to you all for welcoming me to your great family of friends . I think I can be happy here and maybe I'll write a few more poems . Until then I'll welcome any comments and view all your poems with a great sence of pride to be among you . |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
An Angles wing has touched today welcome there poet I shall greet and say With words your surely have your way A poem in colours of ray The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions  |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Don't expect any better poems from me, that is my best work, my other poems will have to live in it's shaddow . Many thanks . |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
This was my first poem, if you missed it before, I have just brought it to the top . Tom . With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
Well, I've read it now, and I'm glad that I did - it deserves another airing. It's very beautiful.... "I am happy " ....and truthful? You deserve to be. Keep going. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Tom, Thanks for sending this up again, I had missed it 1st time around. What can I say that has not already been said about your incredible work? Not much, suffice to say you are an inspiration to alot of us Tom. WELL DONE!! |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Tom your poetry is expressive, very well written...I enjoyed it! welcome to passions!!! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful!! Thanks for bringing it back up! I missed so many beautiful ones I'm sure when I was having computer problems! Denise |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Beautiful poem, I love your style. I am a proof reader at heart so I will suggest you go back and edit this line, The song, So sweat and pure, And true . (Sweet) I know that is what you meant! Hope you are not offended, it is just such a beautiful poem I hate to stumble over that word. [This message has been edited by Septsong (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Teddybear New Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 1 |
Baker mate Like the poem, keep going mate Bear |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Thanks, I didn't expect so many of you to reply, Thanks for the proof reading - septsong, my spelling is apaling ( is apaling spelt like that ?) I have been inspired by all your poetry to write even more of my own, thanks for the compliments, they make me feel like I belong . Bear, I didn't know you were on here, put some poetry up so I can read it, Welcome, I hope you enjoy being hear as much as I do . L.Of.L Tom . With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautiful poem Tom and welcome to passions. |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Cheers Martie, I am glad you replied, it really made my day . With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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