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Once Again
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Once Again |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648
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~ Once again Another part of me dies Thrust clean through By reality’s sword I bleed Again drop by drop by drop ~ drip ~ drip ~ drip |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Piercing piece you have written here. I have gone for bandages, hold pressure on that wound. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise, dear Your creative juices are flowing. I know the feel of that blade. And you wrote it so well. Good work Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
And Corinne puts the drip drip action into fast reverse, replenishing Denise's blood supply! I like how you push the envelope, Denise! Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ouch, I felt that from here...and now I drip too... |
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Ravenlearns2fly Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 71 |
oooooo!! I really liked this poem,words at times can bring such vision to thine eyes. Raven |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Dee I really like this and the way it fell like drops at the endof the poem!  "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise~ This is very creative. I like the message and the format. I like the way it 'flows' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW! Denise, this is fantastic, loved the way it flowed and the format too. Terrific writing. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Denise: HUSG I love the way I look in your eyes, I'm just me tho'... We are all works in progress, no? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I offer you a chalice, and let not a drop be stricken...This is GOOD "d"! Thanks! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Danny, Elizabeth, Corinne, Martie, Raven, Romantic Heart, Marge, Dark Angel, Rainbow (HUGS), and Serenity for reading and for your kind comments. You all are so wonderful! Denise |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Denise, This is awesome writing I love the form you used and the whole way you wrote this. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You sure have a way of portraying your pain and hurt! Denise, keep praying, they know not what they do. You bring tears to my to know you're hurting so bad. I love ya Denise! ~hugs~ |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Denise, I too, like the format you used here .... a poem that the reader really feels .... Excellent !! If you are hurting, I send you hugs... and if you're not, I send you hugs ... |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you Gloria, Rebecca and Pepper for reading and commenting and for the hugs! They are appreciated! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Denise...me thinks free verse is becoming of you |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Denise...me thinks free verse is becoming of you |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you Ruth! I'm glad you think so! Denise |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
d, To staunch that wound , some humor quick Bandages will need , that little ***** |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
ROFL  Oh, that's great, Dr. Moose! Thanks, I needed that! Denise |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
very very creative!! |
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