Open Poetry #6 |
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Path of Sorrow |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
As I walked to school I kept my eyes to the ground I saw no reason to look up In my sorrows I drowned Day after day I did the same Following the same sad path I kept to my own little world One forged of bitterness and wrath That path was one of sorrow One I learned quite well I kept note of every step That led me to my hell A step here, my father Who beat me when I was bad Another step, my mother Who aspired to make me mad But this path paved in anger Led me to a graver fate To school with my peers Who taught me how to hate Once in awhile I would look up And be blinded by the light I decided to stick to my path With all the normal sights One day I got sick of it all And decided to look around I saw a whole other world Just waiting to be found Again I apologize for not being around lately, this is the first serious poem I have written in over a week ![]() |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Never apologize for life. This is pretty good..I'm seeing a transition in your work.. Take your time...we'll be here the next time you have a chance to write. ![]() |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
If anyone can relate to the free time thing Travis, I can. I have been on line 3 times in the last 2 weeks. Mostly I check and reply to my mail, IF I have the time. I am not sure if anyone remembers me anymore...lol. Glad to see you have found a brighter path my friend. ((hug)) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You know, you're right, this is a serious poem, but the way you've chosen to bring around the ending speaks to me as more of a beginning, and I LIKE that! Good writing, my friend. ![]() ~ Claire |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I like the hopeful ending, Mistik. Good to see you again... |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
God how I can relate. I know exactly what you felt like. Wonderful piece ![]() |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mystik~ So glad to see that you are 'looking around'. Take care and come on here and visit anytime you've got the time. I'm wishing good, good things for you. ![]() Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ouch, me luv. I remember walking this path...and how lonely and painful it is... and yes, you brought me back, you poet, you! luv to you... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Spring and a new beginning. What a great combination Best wishes Liz |
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LoveBug![]()
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Mistik, this is a wonderful poem that I can relate to. I'll be glad to wait awhile for the next beautiful piece! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Poet deVine- Thanks, and yea, I noticed that too, my poems seem to have more optimistic endings, dunno whats wrong with me ![]() Marilyn- Thanks, and for me I have been able to get on each day, but it has been in 10 minute spurts ![]() Meadowmuse- Thanks ![]() ![]() Balladeer- Yea, its good to be back, even if for such a short time ![]() One Who Understands- Thanks ![]() Marge Tindal- Thanks, and I shall do my best to show up as often as possible, but I am not promising anything... serenity- Thank you ![]() Elizabeth Santos- heh, thanks, but I didnt even think of linking this poem to the season, heh, it just decided to come out right now ![]() LoveBug- Why thank you, and I will try not to make you wait too long ![]() |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I like the hope and the ending too! Very good! Denise |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh an outlet for dismal thinkin is good here we are write dark dark till yuh cant no more than try writin bout a butterfly and you'll be all better...good poem yuh |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Denise & Walt- Danke ![]() ![]() |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I too liked the ending man. I know, coming from me that sounds wierd, but hey.. that's me! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
There's nothing wrong with having an optimistic outlook! I'm really glad to see it ![]() Look forward to the next time you can pop in and see us ![]() <*\\\>< YOUR LIFE IS NOT A COINCIDENCE. IT'S A REFLECTION OF YOU! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well you found that "whole other world" much earlier than I did, my friend. Took me some 30 years. I can still remember it coming into view, though. Like wiping cobwebs from the eyes and feeling the sun for the first time. You've taken me back to a wonderful moment. Thank you. Michael |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Christopher- why would it be wierd? did I miss something? ![]() ![]() WhtDove- Thanks ![]() ![]() Michael- It makes my happy to hear that I could help you relive such an enlightening moment in your life. Thanks for giving me the opportunity ![]() |
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