Happy Eating (Haiku)----first try so don't laugh

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Happy Eating (Haiku)----first try so don't laugh

Chris Goodman
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since 2000-01-28

Posts 92
Issaquah, Washington usa

0 posted 2000-02-20 07:49 PM

Sun warms coastal soil
Crab and shrimp wash up on bay
Pig roast over fire clay

Blue Moon

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

1 posted 2000-02-20 08:15 PM

Who's laughing?

I think this is very cool indeed! I sure couldn't write one if someone held a gun to my head for it! LOL Very nice imagery in this....I have no clue if it's done "right" (haiku format) but I like it nonetheless....

Chris Goodman
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since 2000-01-28

Posts 92
Issaquah, Washington usa

2 posted 2000-02-20 08:18 PM

Ah, you are too nice.  I am blushing.
Anyway, INclan was kind enough to give me
the details about Classical Haiku.  I think
it is endearing and the simplicity is
refreshing.
Chris

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INclan
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since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

3 posted 2000-02-20 08:26 PM

A good first shot Chris. There is no need to rhyme in Haiku. Yes, Haiku is ALL about imagery....short and sweet. Happy writing.

INclan

Chris Goodman
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since 2000-01-28

Posts 92
Issaquah, Washington usa

4 posted 2000-02-20 08:29 PM

Thanks INclan,
I really wasn't trying to ryhme, but
that is what I ended up with.
I will keep the practice up.
Chris

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CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14

Posts 685
USA

5 posted 2000-02-20 11:00 PM

This is great Chris...although I really no nothing about the art of Haiku either...

Maybe one of the two of you could help me out also?

Chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

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