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Just the Wind - challenge thang
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Just the Wind - challenge thang |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Just the Wind Tagging along my uninvited guest, wrinkled paper footfalls, spinner of iron webs sticking to a lazy mind. Night takes icy bites, coils ‘round bare ankles, trees mock,wind-whipped laughs from safety of high limbs, down to the dank stink of rot sucking all sweetness. Shroud of time vaporizes, cold, capturing all - fruitless trees fall earthen graves gape to drag me home kissing dust. © 2000 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 09-13-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW EERIE AS EERIE ITSELF.... EEEEEEE regards Corinne, Sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Convince yourself it's just the wind. I don't think so. Good poem. sort of carried me along with it. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I like it. I could almost feel the wind chilling my bones. Very good descriptions. I look forward to reading more |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Glad to be home after this one, eh?? Nice job here, Corinne..  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Shroud of time vaporizes, cold, capturing all - fruitless trees fall earthen graves gape to drag me home kissing dust. ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...like like LIKE! This is great Corinne...well done  K"He looked across the silky surface of the Severn... it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..." From Jack Maggs |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, Sudhir, Kethry, Alan, Nan and Severn! Corinne |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Shroud of time vaporizes, cold, capturing all - fruitless trees fall earthen graves gape to drag me home kissing dust. Corinne, I hate walking down abandoned streets at night... wonderfully written, giving me the creeps now.. I think I might stay inside from now on. This is the hour when the mysteries emerge A strangeness so hard to reflect A moment so moving goes straight to your heart" JOy divison |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, this reminds me of short stories by Ray Bradbury... very very good... But stop kissing that dust when you could be kissing... me.. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ You write with such ease of talent. It's easy to be buffeted about by your winds. Quite the rise to the occasion. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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