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in the form of a man
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in the form of a man |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
i've lost my mind truth in the form of a man like little pieces i misplaced along the way coming back warped creeping their way into my embrace. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this was very good. i liked the way it flowed sort of jaggedly, like the little pieces you describe. jann elizabeth |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Cool technique in this... I think the word 'creeping' sets the tone effectively - and makes the whole poem.. well done! K The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
shira this poem makes sense to me. i hope you can put yourself back together in the form of you. josh |
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