When I saw her with another man

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Open Poetry #7

When I saw her with another man

Ixtab
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 105
MEXICAlpan de las tunas

0 posted 2000-05-18 08:50 PM

Hate me she pleaded.
Ask for the moon not to phase
for the sun not to rise
for rain not drop
for thunder not to sound
I answered...

And my eyes became water
my knees sustained a dead weight
opression of uselesness
dire heart sadly pumping
my unfelt, thick , blood.

Why did i fly into hell?
a road well cautioned it was
but blind love's guide
is the goddess of insanity

Who could know love
without tasting bitterness?
who could know victory
if fallen ye haven´t.

Hate me she pleaded

So I Will

Let the moon be always full
night be eternal
rain shoot to the sky
thunder be mute.
our love die.

netswan
Senior Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 1369
Washington

1 posted 2000-05-18 11:52 PM

Hi There Ixtab - what a great poem.
Wonderful

netswan

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2000-05-19 01:02 AM

Ixtab~
You know what ?
I like this.
Raw emotion told with such feeling.
You've got some great lines in here.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2000-05-19 01:08 AM

Wow! This is very sad, but very truthful. Overall I enjoyed it...especially the way you ended it.

Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 2000-05-19 01:09 AM

Hey! Long time no see!!! This is a good poem..nice to read you again.

Angelwings
Member

since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

5 posted 2000-05-19 02:06 AM

Wow~
This is told with such feeling. It's painful to let a love die but it's healthier that way. Thank you for sharing your pain it makes other feel that they aren't alone either. I enjoyed reading your work and look forward to doing it again.

A dream is only impossible once you stop dreaming!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2000-05-19 08:45 AM

Well written with lots of feelings and emotions. James

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