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Open Poetry #7

how close can we get?

7
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 113
Amherst, MA, USA

0 posted 2000-04-28 11:50 PM

note: I wrote this in response to the prompt "how close can we get?"

...

why do I see the sign
“pull to open”
and yet I push?
it remains closed
resistance unfound
that rare sound
of a door opening against
my will
or the will created
by fear of that sign
“pull to open”

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

1 posted 2000-04-29 12:03 PM

A right tight poem, saying much with few words.

Welcome to Passions, too!

Corinne

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2000-04-29 06:53 AM

"pull to open"---I like this so much---lovely portrayal of me pushing when the door says 'pull'---and, I am now delighted to know--others, as well....push/pull....Thanx.

Brandyn Sand
Member

since 2000-04-21

Posts 82
Columbia, SC

3 posted 2000-04-29 08:31 AM

I could really relate to this. It seems I, more often than not, end up doing those things I consciously try to avoid doing. Very effective use of symbolism here.

LoveBug

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since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2000-04-29 11:05 AM

7, this is a wonderful poem. I love the metaphor. Great job.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde

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