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Waiting On The Afterglow
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Waiting On The Afterglow |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Waiting on the Afterglow~ I want to lay with you in afterglow ... and share the intensity that we two know. I want to feel your rhythm, your cadence, your rhyme ... then touch infinite in those moments sublime. To witness the power when your passions rise, to see the depth of your need ... the fire in your eyes. I want to ride your strength and know your force ... discover your ache and feel it surging from its source. I want to explore the mysteries of your soul's inner core, to be taken to the places in me ... with you ... never visited before. Then taste your essence and kiss your grace, inhale you in then quietly lie in that hidden contented place. I want to feel your body's heat flowing thru mine ... to know the ecstasy of you ... this need will sweetly define. I want to lay next to you and just take you in ... feel the burn of this ... between us ... beneath my skin. To hear you whisper and softly exhale my name ... to know in this rare moment ... we are at last one in the same. Janet Marie There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
WHEW....If I could draw a picture of this it would show a chemistry flask smoking with the puffs forming the two silhouettes of lover's embraced in a very passionate kiss. What a tender feeling of expression showing the real chemistry of love and desire. Superbly penned my friend. You don't want to know the images it brings to my mind's eye.LOL... [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Then taste your essence and kiss your grace, inhale you in then quietly lie in that hidden contented place." "To hear you whisper and softly exhale my name ... to know in this rare moment ... we are at last one in the same." Oh my, oh my! Queen of romance reigns supreme! Dear Janet Marie, you're passion burns brightly in this sensual and tantalizing piece ... woohoo, wonderful JM!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet-- my god woman, this is beautiful!! i know many times I have said your work is awesome...but this takes the cake. the depth and intensity expressed in this took my breath away. the only word that sums it up is WOW! Girl, I love your writing...it touches so d*mn deep down within the soul and heart. awe inspiring and more. love ya! take care, amy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Whew...this is just under the steamy line... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh my God!!! YES! YES! YES! You want to feel my rhyme? I only do ballads...and they're very long! Janet MArie, I've never said this to a woman before but...you could be more delicious than Spam! *covering the can with a towel as I speak * On a more serious note, wow! This poem has it all....feeling, passion, style, perfect words and a wonderful atmosphere it creates to the reader's mind...and right now my mind would be illegal in 42 states! MORE!!!!! |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
*sighhhhhhhhhhhh* Exquisite poetry, Janet Marie. Wow. =) LJ "A smile is when your inner beauty comes outside." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
My girl...I'm just beaming at you from over here!!! You do write so beautifully---this is that ache we know so well, and you took and put it to music baby!!! I'll e ya the rest, because I just can't post that here...rofl...*wink* TRULY beautiful. YOU are. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, I love it when you get this passion going. It's sweet, its hot, its a very vivid image and I want some of it..  Just meet me under the arch at the appointed time.... Parker |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"I want to explore the mysteries of your soul's inner core, to be taken to the places in me ... with you ... never visited before." and--- "To hear you whisper and softly exhale my name ... to know in this rare moment ... we are at last one in the same." In a poem that made me want to quote your last reply to my 'Clouds..." - so full of lines I'll treasure - these quotes stand out for me - you're definitely the holder of the queenly crown and I see no one coming close right now. Did I say "Whew"? - this is definitely a "Whew" as well. later queen sensual gater |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You just blew my computor. If I were twenty years younger, you would be in trouble. You are my friend and loved in different ways so delicate and fragile that to look at them directly would make them melt. You are very talented and I am proud to have you as a loving friend. winkiewinkie. Sy PS. That's one hell of a poem. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Jan sounds like somethings brewing in the kitchen...sorry bad joke.... I will just say wow this is hot... phew.... beautiful poetry Evea-glowin-gator. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mark ... trust me cowboy when I tell ya I already know what comes to your mind ... and I like it ...and thank you for the cool imagery from your chemistry lab as well..its all your fault....brewing that raspberry tea in your flask you KNOW what that stufff does to me LOL ...thank you for seeing my many sides. ...me thinks-- ya know me well, my oh so special friend. Kit ... LOL ...thank you for the crown ..but I share it today as always .. there have been some really excellent sensual poems in here this weekend.. INCLUDING YOURS maybe we poets are heating up for one lash hurrah of indian summer??? love it when ya go woo-hoo too Amy girl... your replies make me glow...thank you sweetie...i was trying for intense..so glad you felt it ....thank you my head cheerleader  Sun, thanks for the whew... and yes sometimes we gotta steam the screen ..I was trying to stay on JUST this side of the line...LOL..didnt want ya to have to take me over to the Adult forum  LOLDeer ... LOL ..hon...I think I hurt something laughing at this reply ... and ya know me thinks you and I could find something "illegal" in all 50 states to do with that Spam ..    ROTFL....(hehehe) ..and what poet lady could resist those LONG ballads ... LOL not me baby!!!...thank you for this amazing reply my sweet friend... I do so adore you and your "Spammy kisses"Lori ... thank you for the sigh, the wow and the exquisite...very much and welcome to passions Sweet Sen ... LOL....hey baby...thank you for such a beautiful reply ...and that email made my day ...TRUST ME ROTFLMAO ... me loves ya when your baaaaad LOL....its all good...sometimes ya gotta go with that ache ... *wink* P-man.... hey you....ya know --me thinks that arch would never be the same.. we might "bend" it or something... (hehe) LOLbring your pedestals sweet tease and I'll be there with bells on LOL...TY my friend. ya always make me smile. Wil... thank you kind poet sir... and you did some steaming of your own today .. we all need a good hosing off LOL..poetically speaking of course.. TY for always reading me so graciously. SY-baby ...didnt mean to short your puter LOL..was hoping to ring those chimes of yours tho *smile* ..thank you SO MUCH for this VERY sweet reply and I treasure you more than you can know ...and age is SO irrelevant .. You write with all the fire, passion, and cool of a rock star .. .but even better is the wisdom and grace you posses that only comes with age and living life. Thank you for sharing that with us all here..we are all better for you and your poetry. love you too my poetic winkie gator pal. Bri gator....ya know your right....its that dang raspberry tea..you know how it effects me.. and its ALWAYS brewing in the kitchen .. thank you my sweet friend ... for everything you shared with me this weekend.. I will e ya back soon.. THANK you all for these replies...were having way too much fun love ya all jm |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
could I have some of this? wow "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
I want to ride your strength and know your force ... discover your ache and feel it surging from its source. I want to explore the mysteries of your soul's inner core, to be taken to the places in me ... with you ... never visited before. Then taste your essence and kiss your grace, inhale you in then quietly lie in that hidden contented place. ---------- ---------- Those lines say so well what I feel, I have tears in my eyes. Once again, your words move me like no other. Do you always outdo yourself so well? Much love, girl. Much love all, Krissie |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--I think you meant to steam up all the computers at Passions...you did...and you did it on purpose...Oh yes..that's a good thing!! Some terrific writing here girl!! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Janet Marie- wow...this is so beautiful and passionate...i'm loving it. wonderful write, my friend. hugs, -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
it s hiot inm hrer ...sorry hard to type with my palms all sweaty...whew..turn on the a/c...very nice Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
**Male poets form a line on the right.... Testing will begin Question #1. Say my name... Wow...you overheated my puter 3 times...and it figures that my mom was here when I opened it the first time...btw...she wanted to know if you needed a "filter" on your screen to read in here...not sure what she meant by that but she thought you may know I just love it when you are inspired like this...it sizzles and steams baby...nothing like it!! If I start worshiping your poetic feet there will surely be talk so I'll remain standing and tell ya that anything that causes 'deer to give up Spam for even a second is down right Explosive!!! Now....back to the tesing   #2. Are you multi-talented?...can you write poetry while you do that [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kathleen ... LOL..sure you can have some.. all ya gotta do is light a fire and then fly into it ...TY for the wow LOL Krissie ... thank you hon .. I think I may have pulled something on this one LOL .. thank you for always making me glow from your replies. Martie .. So a little steam is good huh?? LOL thanks for seeing my good side while me muse is being sooo bad *winkwink* Vicky ... thank you girlie girl Im so glad you enjoyed ..so did I LOL Ron ... LOL ...Im so glad I could bring summer back for you .. thank you for the sweaty..ERRR I mean great reply Holly.....OH GIRL ... dont you give ALL my moth secrets away ROTFLMAO... OK OK... so Im a moth on fire again ...LOL and tell your mom to send the extra strength filters LOL OH and mothballs HEHE now lets take these Flame applications..head south get Miss Sen.. and see what damage we can do YOWZERS... so much to do in the south these days love ya me thanks all for these great replies jm |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Speaking of ADMIRATION... JM... You have captured my respect & attention! WONDERFUL... Can't wait for more! "Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind!"...Dr. Seuss |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Yes I did need a smoke after that! |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
JanetMarie~ My dear, dear friend..... WOW!!!!!!!!!!!! This is amazing, and it puts my imagination into overdrive, dear! Tell me, have you been a bad *winkie~winkie* again??? Come on now, fess up! Anyway, I do love this. Such passion and fire from your words brings my heart to a boil. (And it is nowhere near sunrise yet!) Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Janet, pass the fan please! It's getting decidedly warm in here...mmmm..on second thoughts leave the fan we might just fan up the flames again! Very intense this one is, wow!"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Passionate as always Janet Marie Pauls back at passions For the time being at least Hope your muse is back and kicking Appears to be at the very least Oh Danny boy, the pipes, the pipes are calling From glen to glen, and down the mountain side The summer's gone, and all the roses falling 'Tis |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*WOW* this was Hot love it....the whole poem.....every word every line.....superb Janet ((hugs))) Charisma |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ A richly satisfying read. Passion with fever ... I found it expressive of a depth of emotions. Go gal ... you write excite ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Todd .. thank you sir ... nice to see ya back... and ya gotta give up those smokes Terry ... LOL...well sorry to stir ya up to where ya cant sleep...and you know me.. I am alway confessing to something in my poetry. TY sweet freind...always happy to see your name back here.... hey ..did ya ever get that cd i told ya about??? hope so. Eagle ... so lets fan those flame....me thinks you can take the heat LOL ... you being from down under...this is a cool breeze LOL.TY my friend.. so glad you enjoyed..sometimes we gotta write about something besides "fate and destiny" LOL Paul ... hey you... I've missed ya...stay for awhile....thats the great thing about here.. its like home .. ya can leave and when you come back...youll see we saved ya a place. Charisma .... TY for the WOW and the superb.... Margie.... yes me thinks fever is a good word ...LOL and I like that... "write with excite" TY sweet poetess.THANK YOU ALL..... love ya all in poetry land NOW its back to work for me during the work....I'll be here reading.... *sigh* ... the weekends need to be longer.... later sweet -poet-gators jm |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ you write words to fall in love by.....**SIGH** this is one of my favorites from you....I felt it in every part of me, and yes, those images brought to mind are quite ummmmm well, YOU KNOW!! -SEA |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I am having my husband read this and I expect no less than what you had. Wow, this is the best way to feel. Thank you for sharing!!!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Water. . .Water. . . Water!!! *splashing himself* MORE ICE!!!! Did I mention that I like this one? --------------------------------------------------------< !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 10-30-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Great work, JM! I think that this is the best work you've done! Just letting all that passion out! Corinne |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet I have felt this afterglow when I was with someone special making Love...won't say who and won't say when...with sex you hit and run...when you make love you enjoy the experience and feel so content that you just want to remain in each others arms forever...enjoying the soft sensuality...and you don't want the afterglow to end...James |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Janet, each time I read something of yours, i think, "this is the best poem of Janet's I have read". And then along comes a better one! This is so passionate and beautiful. I am in awe. Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hey Janet, I don't know if you have ever listened to this song called "Afterglow of your Love" by Quiet Riot... or not... but this is definitely a MOST BRILLIANT AFTERGLOW.... WOW, WOW and more WOWs.... Regards, Sudhir |
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SouthernStar Junior Member
since 2000-10-30
Posts 23Georgia |
WHOA, this is the first piece I've read like this since I joined and I must say, I like it, I like it. WOW. Tessa |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Damn!!! Never a sexy firefighter around when you need one! Good Lord girl! And I thought my pain killers were good.. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I'd like you to kiss my grace too. Grace needs the respect he deserves... please neel down and pay homage to my grace... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sea-gator.. thank ya sweets.. your replies are quite loveable too thanks for always reading me girlie. Inot2B ... LOL..you want the same tht I had huh? LOL..well be careful hon cause I think I pulled something on this one ..hope your hubby enjoyed and then YOU too hehe ..let us know in your own afterglow poems *smile* Thank you for the fun reply.Sven... careful or your gonna spontainiously combust LOL TY for the read and let me find a hose for ya Corinne ... thank you very much... and yes..sometimes we gotta let it all hang out LOL.. SBJ... well we love a man who wont kiss and tell... and yes you are right... afterglow is very often the best part of making love. thank you for sharing and reading, Dee... thank you VERY much for that sweet poet...everytime I read one of your replies I feel the same way ... thank you for such generous compliments... I am not in the forums as much right now. during the week...I will have to see if I have missed any of your work of late. Sud..hey you...so glad to see your name here and thank you always for the brillance you shine on me....Im pleased you enjoyed this... yes I ve heard that song. Southern Star... thank you very much welcome to passions and thanks for the wow and Whoa LOL...Marina.... LOL..yeah baby...I NEEDED pain killers after that LOL .... Just kidding....nothing like a poet and poetry to inspire great thing in us huh?? *winkiewinkie* shhhhhhh LOL P-man.... hey you ...LOL...your gonna go blind if ya keep comming back here.. and as for grace....oh yeah..cant ever underestimate grace ... and I got strong poetic knees LOL your bad....so bad...such a tease you are.... have you been putting my raspberry tea in your juicer?? LOL thanks everyone...these replies have been fun... love ya in poetry land jm |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Janet, Just what did you put in the rasberry tea. This hot piece was afterburn in motion.I think I might spontaneously combust also, just at the thought of it. *winkie winkie*  Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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angelface Junior Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 40Savannah area, Georgia |
I give you the highest of creative writing praise: It made me feel like I was "in that hidden contented place." *she gives Janet Marie a standing ovation* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Kethry.. LOL...Im not sure what is in that tea...aphrodisiac of ACHE me thinks... let me hose ya down with Sven. TY for the hot reply angelface... thank you SO much for such a wonderful and gracious reply....welcome to passions and I look forward to your work. thanks to all for the sweet reads jm |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WHew...this one is a bit HOT!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Get it on Girl!!! Bring it on home!! Good lovin just kissin and huggin and jug-a luggin bunch of lovin.....wheeeeee haw.....you're gonna have to redo the hardwood floors after that session..cause I know lady you had to melt the verathane...made my eyes roll back in my head like a dying calf in a hailstorm..whew where's my medication, I needs to soothe my soul..hot damn!! |
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jonmcm Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 222England |
Janet, what a great  read. I was so excited by this poem, that I clicked the submit button before finishing the message!Cheers Jon [This message has been edited by jonmcm (edited 11-01-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hoot-girl....thank you for the whew LOL..yes hot is one word ... did it make ya think of oatmeal??? LOLEthome....LOL LOL you made me laugh so hard at this reply.... my poetry has been called a lot of things.... but thats the first time these metaphors were used...LOL... a calf in a hailstorm???? you are poetry sir LOL THANK YOU for such an enthusiastic reply my friend. SO glad your back. Jon.... LOL...well thank you poet sir....so glad you enjoyed..and I always enjoy when a poet submits hehe...thanks for the excite .thanks all for the sweet treat replies jm |
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