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He Said Goodbye
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He Said Goodbye |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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He Said Goodbye It was the final word the ultimate opposite of hello how are you good morning nice to see you it was the final goodbye no coming around or coming back nor even a return to be thought of it was the final goodbye and like the spirit of the season like soft owl wings on the wind like the spirit passing from the soul and the final knock on the door it was the final goodbye all he left behind was the whisper of falling leaves October’s final moon candy kisses and cider sweet murmurings it was the final goodbye. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I have given one of those final goodbye's and it is not something I take litely...took many years of emotional abuse, frustration, longing, and pain and anger before I knew the final goodbye had already been given...James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
can relate on that one too..it hurt always when it happen. well done. ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, yes one of the hardest things is to say goodbye, knowing there won't be anymore hello or hi. You've written this so beautifully, showing just exactly how it is. Lovely Kari, this is so telling. Absolutely excellant. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Goodbye is always harded thing to say. He says goodbye as he leaves me behind, waving out to me as he is on the door, He waves goodbye to me as he leaves, He finally said goodbye and made me cry, goodbye, How did you like it?I love your poem. |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Wonderful writing, you've captured the feeling perfectly; it's never easy hearing a final goodbye or giving one either. Hugs, Pepper Pepper "I honor the place in you, that when you are in that place, and I am in that place in me, we are in the same place" Ram Dass |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
What word is more final than goodbye? You expressed it very well. be well. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
This is incredible...extremely powerful. "There is no greater power than the power of goodbye" (Madonna). |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"Goodby... said the wind to the tree as it rustled it's leaves, Goodby... said the snow to the sun as it watered the ground, Goodbye... so long... adieu... but that doesn't mean I've stopped loving you... wjb." Wonderful poem - tender thoughts, my friend. It's how we accept goodbyes that are most important in the end. Touched by this... jwesley |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
even a poem as sad as this- you've written with such poetic flair - i can only call it beautiful - tho i write thru misty eyes. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Just read this again *Sigh*  jwesley |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
oops - double posted! Sorry. [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 11-02-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--Good bye's are so sad and sometimes so final...you have said this so well...the ending hits hard. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I never did like good-byes. . . Touching and heartfelt my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
that all of you have come in to read...pleases me...and I thank each and every one of you, for being part of the inspiration that puts the quill into my hand... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ 'the final goodbye' 'the ultimate opposite of hello' What a comparison .... I'd venture to say that sums it up accurately. Now *smile*, lady ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sunshine~ This is so sad yet the way you have written it, it is as beautiful as it is sad ~HUGS~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marge, my dear...I am ALWAYS smiling...{~,^} and winking... Tracy, there is a lot of beauty in sadness, it always depends how you look upon it! Thank you for reading... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You have penned a heartfelt beauty of sadness in this one of yours. Hope all is well. Good-byes are never easy though sometimes they are very neccesary. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sunshine I like that..."The ultimate opposite of hello,"...you have really developed your poetic craft and taken it to greater heights sort of like "soft owl wings on the wind" and the "spirit is passing from your soul" right on to the page...wonderful work just simply very very good writing!! |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I felt every word of this.........I like how you refrence the opposite of hello. Very well written and very heart felt from this reader. Very sad......but something that happens all to many times in out lifetimes. Hugs Jenn E |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Karilea-- this is so touching! beautiful and sad! you have expressed your feelings remarkably well in this piece! your poetry is always inspirational and always a joy to read. take care. ~amy~ p.s. Hello!  just trying to make you |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
falling leaves October’s final moon candy kisses and cider sweet murmurings love it sunshine...lovely images ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, now what have I told you about skulking around at the back. Come out girl, and display your talent. This is so wonderful Kari it really is. So I'm boosting you back to the front page. Take care Mushy Marsha Majestic Marsha Ahhh! Mischievious Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, it's just a poem...but thank you for your thoughts... Ethome, you know, at first I thought the whole idea too simplistic, but this seems to be the key phrase...thank you... Jenn, it IS heartfelt, thank you for feeling it too... Amy, the kindest words...thank you... Victoria, so glad you enjoyed... Marsha, yes, ma'am! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I was so intent on reading this I didn't realise that Snoops had put his paw on my arm and had rested his head on it so I nearly gave him a black eye when I started to type this reply...ROFL Heartfelt here too, Sunshine.. HUSG |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Damn, Karilea, this is too much. I know that I say this a lot lately, but this is so exactly what happened to me, in October, too! I always love your poems, this one reached out and grabbed me by the throat.. Hope you are not having a sad month, also. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
RG, hug Snoops for me... Cat...I hope things improve for you soon...good things take time...look for small packages of life...they will appear, believe me... thank you both for reading... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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