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I wished the world were set to slow...
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I wished the world were set to slow... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I wished the world were set to slow Like with our hands, when we let go The pyramids should be for never To crumble and dissipate Eternal and then forever Our love would precipitate Slowly as a heartache’s numbing I would like to see it coming Your heart like the fall of rain I want to feel the pitter-patter When both are shouting in my brain Only love really matters Only love can heal the pain I couldn’t keep my eyes from falling As I wished the world to slow Everything crashed and fell for me And I was the first to ever know A pulse was found rhythmic beating As we all were cooed to sleep The signs that flashed were repeating Love doesn’t ever come by cheap So I woke and read my watch And seethed at my delay A heart is falling like raindrop dew And I’m wishing my life away Pyramids crumble and then rebuilt Flowers come back once they wilt Forever, the gulp of a seagulls beak All my joy lay upon your cheek And there in little slowing sips As life is given from your lips I feel the pitter-patter The quietness The shouting Did lightning strike when we kissed My watch has stopped I got my wish! [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-07-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Walty, I like this my friend, especially this...... Pyramids crumble and then rebuilt Flowers come back once they wilt Forever, the gulp of a seagulls beak All my joy lay upon your cheek And there in little slowing sips As life is given from your lips I feel the pitter-patter The quietness The shouting Did lightning strike when we kissed My watch has stopped I got my wish! some great thoughts!  Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Love doesn’t ever come by cheap Yeah - don't I know it Walty. Remind to stay sane ok? Hey...this sensitive side in your poetry is great to read... ( and YOU can read all mine first heh ) KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
W-O-W...you have ~sighing...this was beautiful ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
sev :P and for good measure same to you darky hehe and naked thanky |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This is unusual, but tender nontheless. All my joy lay upon your cheek And there in little slowing sips As life is given from your lips I feel the pitter-patter The quietness The shouting Did lightning strike when we kissed My watch has stopped I got my wish! Very touching my friend! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
you've expressed wonderful feelings walt, glad you're in a happy kinda mood. later. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You keep this up, and we'll all say WOW... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Gee...well I guess neither of us will be reading each other's poetry much... tch what a shame eh?  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ You are PRECIOUS ! 'All my joy lay upon your cheek And there in little slowing sips As life is given from your lips I feel the pitter-patter The quietness The shouting Did lightning strike when we kissed My watch has stopped I got my wish!' Me thinkee some of that candy sweetness stayed in you ... love it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow thanx for the turnout ooo sorry too much election watching |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
It's a great poem, dear. Your getting a watch for Christmas yanno. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx sweetheart but if its lunch shouldnt we be together yuh yuh yuh yuh heheheheh |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well I ain't getting you a watch, just a few kind words for this really neat read....kind, kind, kind... **grin*** jwesley |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Interesting - My watch stopped at a very opportune time recently as well... I think I made a mistake - I fixed it..  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx nan and jwesley o yuh |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Walt your poetry continues to grow in leaps and bounds...This is an incredible piece, and I continue to read you and be amazed. Your poetry is like a box of chocolates---grin--you're never quite sure what you're going to get! But it's ALL GOOD. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx serenity its always a blast to get a reply from someone whose writing i adore so much yuh yuh |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Walt, I love this! More beautiful serious work from you. The ending was absolutely priceless! |
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