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I used to put you on
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I used to put you on |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
I used to put you on we fit, us two silk and satin pressed against white shirt black tie picking your shirt up afterwards I used to put you on breathing the essence of you filling me with the caresses from a few hours before we fit us two we used to talk and laugh and I used to put you on my favorite comfortable shirt you wrapped me in understanding and acceptance but you grew your time for me smaller your claim to fame bigger and I didn’t grow with you I stayed the same and now we no longer fit, us two uncomfortable tension pulled and tugged what was left of us you sought escape and I stayed the same these days I sit in the past with you my lips almost remembering when I used to put you on like a smile |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
this is a lovely piece. the images and metaphors are very well written.... and your style seems quite familiar to me... i do think i know you, yes  ... but i may be wrong..  i don't like the pen name, though... nope  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A bittersweet poem, beautiful and yet so sad in the end. I know that longing and remembrance well. Very well expressed!  Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
I agree with Doreen. Excellent piece. Really touched home with me. In short...made me cry. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Yanno, this could be me. I've been put on a lot, and I was never the wiser. Now I'm famous for being put on. Do we know each other??? *quizzical looks* I like this poem - great metaphor - I apologize if my light heartedness puts you off. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
jinxed, Boy does this poem bring back some old feelings and memories. Very well done < !signature--> ~~Tara aka rp25 [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (edited 09-29-2000).] |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
thanks all, have one foot out the door as I type, gotta run........thanks again, am please that you like...... doreen, not sure what you mean...the nick fits just fine |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think we're dealing with some of the same feelings. I like this. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Now I think you penned a little of each of us in this one. Great read and keep the nick if it fits.... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I can relate, after reading alot of poems on passions, seems everyone is feeling the same feelings, maybe we need a lonely hearts club..good poem! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like the metaphors used here, they fit so well. Sad that this happens to so many of us, I guess it must be just a part of life, but still it hurts. Great writing, I truly relate to it. Sandra |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
thanks so much, you guys are terrific i just wrote this in a few spare moments yesterday, never thought it would touch hearts ....sad that it does, but glad that you enjoyed |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jinxed~ touch hearts you did, I felt every word. -SEA |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
wanted to say thanks sea, but didn't want to bring this back ....think I waited long enough though for it to stay put |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
well - I like the poem and the poet -- but I'm with Doreen jinxed -- you have a heart! just because there are a few espinados is no reason to throw away a rose.. |
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jinxed Member
since 2000-09-27
Posts 86 |
well, am glad you like the poem...and the poet ...but considering that on top of everything else...sigh..i had to put my dog down last night, and i have a dr's appt today and a dentist's tomorrow...i think the name will stick around for a while...but thank you for the thoughts...roses....are nice |
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