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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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she married her Prince Charming or so she thought turns out that life as the Princess wasn't all it was cracked up to be sure, she got to live in the castle but it was his castle and while the Prince was off fighting battles with the Knights or rescuing other princesses the Princess only had the mice to keep her company this was her life her lonely life she still dreamed that one day he would come to take her away from this to share a castle with her to rescue her instead of rescuing others so that she could sing again he knew that she had a wonderful voice or rather, he would for she would sing for him day and night yet not for him but because of him and while the mice weren't bad company they couldn't hold her during the nights of this, her life her lonely life so, she left and while she would miss the mice she hoped that they would understand understand that she needed to do this if only for her own sanity and in doing so, she broke the rules then came the trial, the fear, the loss the time that she felt it was just her against the world alone along the way, she met a poet, a bard one that helped her learn to sing again she spent almost a year with him learning, growing, changing and now she's on her own a Princess without a castle a story without an end her travels take her to many places the bard weeps for her she does not know why she still roams looking for that Prince not knowing that she needs not another Prince but that bard. . . who would be King to save her life her lonely life ----------------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 10-09-2000).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Sven~ Now this dear Sir...I really liked. I always love how your poetry stands to teach us all some lesson or tell a story. Love the moral in this one. Excellent writing! Take care. amy  "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
I am thankful that I found my Prince charming the first time around. I enjoyed this very much, you have a way with words. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow, where in the world did this come from? Free verse, and done in such a charming way...Sven, you're still weaving...spun gold... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
oh i love this! the tragic fairytale...the unrequited love...so well written sven!! you think the bard will ever win his princess? hugs, dg she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without -clint black |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Amy, I'm glad that you found a lesson in this. . . and that you enjoyed it. . . thank you. . . inot2b, I'm happy for you. . . you're one of the lucky ones. . . thank you my friend. . . Sunshine, where does it always come from? Thank you bright one. . . dg, thank you. . . I don't think that the bard will ever win though. . . Princesses only seem to want Princes. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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PanDol Senior Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 1245USA |
Oh my sweet Prince I have found Though his castle I will never share Off in the distance I watch him Loving him more, leaving me in despair Sven, this is a tale to be heard my friend. I enjoyed this bitter sweet piece. ~PanDol |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
If the princess feels as if she can only be fulfilled thru the prince and the prince can only be fulfilled by rescuing all the other damsels in distress the bard begins to look like a wise choice instead of a lonely life with the prince...but alas if she cannot clearly see this perhaps she will waste her life away but the poet must go on and find love with another who will appreciate him and his talents...yes...James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
PanDol. . . I know. . . thank you my friend. . . glad that you enjoyed. . . James, you would think wouldn't you? But that isn't always the case. . . thank you. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
mmm..love the poem, and it make me think either....always want a prince on the white horse, not seeing the one who is around. still thinking on it.... Charisma |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Well written, Sven, with a lot of longing. I hope there's a happy ending to this someday. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Charisma. . . I hope that you're still thinking. . .and that you liked this. . .thank you. . . Tara, I hope so too. . . thank you. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is a truly sad fairy tale, but Sven I can see the princess just needed her prince who is so busy saving the world that he forgets the one he truly loves his princess, I guess to often in real life this happens to until all the sudden your in this place. I absolutely loved the style of this poem so gallant and lovely. |
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