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Open Poetry #12

catch me i'm dying

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2001-01-20 03:31 PM

catch me, i'm dying;
catch me, i’m dying, burning
up in you.
all the future.

a stone's throw.
mineral clear and
sharp as glass

my reflection of you.
one together, moving
rhythmrhythmrhythm.
rhy
thm.

sighing,
slowly,

sighing slow glass.

catch me in you i'm
dying in you,
sweet.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (edited 01-20-2001).]

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

1 posted 2001-01-20 04:46 PM

Now thats the way to go!

"catch me in you i'm
dying in you,
sweet."

Dawn Eclipse
Senior Member

since 2000-01-31

Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula

2 posted 2001-01-20 05:39 PM

I loved it. the last stanza was great. thanks for the read.

"Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today"
~Broadway Musical RENT~

*Cassandra Roseen*

LoveBug

Moderator

Member Elite

since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

3 posted 2001-01-20 07:03 PM

This is a great piece. I love the way it flows, and I also love the last stanza. Thanks for sharing.

"Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather
"Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2001-01-21 01:51 AM

Glad you all enjoyed.

Mike

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2001-01-21 02:46 AM

This is intense...(of course) and very sexy...an "ooh" from serenity!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2001-01-21 05:56 PM

differently good (which of course makes it good)...

jwesley

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