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since 2001-05-17

Posts 18
Lost in my own world

0 posted 2001-05-31 08:59 AM

Tears

I cry
Tears fall
Right down
My cheek
Soak in
My pillow
So sad
So hurt
There goes
More tears
More pain
More emptiness
I cry
Tears fall

**One of the most adventurous things left for us is to go to sleep. For no one can lay a hand on our dreams.**

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

1 posted 2001-05-31 09:02 AM

cheer up!! be happy!! celebrate

I like this. and I like how you made each line only 2 words long.

Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

~*brittt*~
Member

since 2001-05-09

Posts 76
East Haddam, CT

2 posted 2001-05-31 12:16 PM

Short, sweet and to the point. I loved this. Keep up the good work.
~britt~

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-05-31 12:53 PM

Very well done here. Very sad aswell. Hope things get better.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

dramaqueen22086
Member

since 2001-05-05

Posts 50
Hadlyme, CT

4 posted 2001-05-31 01:01 PM

well, this was really sad

hey if there's something bothering, you need to talk to someone about it. don't hold everything in, b/c if you hold it all in your going to explode. and thats not good, trust me on this talk to someone. besides that i thouhgt it was a really good poem, keep up the good written, i hope you you get though what every you are going though.

~!kellie!~

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

5 posted 2001-05-31 03:09 PM

Hey chick, keep your head up. Just remember I'm always here for ya when you need a shoulder to cry on.

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-05-31 04:36 PM

true poem...i loved this...great job on writing this situation so real...i enjoyed it greatly...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-06-01 11:52 AM

Nice... the format was original, but I found it irritating to read for some reason. Just the way my eyes had to move kinda bothered me, but then again I'm crazy.