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Swaying willow
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Swaying willow |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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Slowly, night approached. Street-lamps are ablaze. From up high I watch As the willow sways. Coiled smoke floats high From my cigarette, As I wonder why You and I have met. When I heard you speak, I was hypnotized And my knees got weak When I saw your eyes. Life was fine somehow Just before you came, But I know that now It won’t be the same. I can’t even think... All appears so blurred... Bonded by the ring, I can’t part with her... But, my heart is yours And with you it stays. Silence. Nothing stirs, Just the willow sways. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i really liked this...as always the imagery was awesome...the flow itself was great...hope to see more...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
I really love this piece... beautiful description of "hopeless love". Like Albert said, some great imagery and flow. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I often relate the Willow tree with lonliness and depression. Do you? I liked this poem. Thought the ending was superb.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow.....this is wonderful  |
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