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Teen Poetry #4

Of Course... Once Again

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

0 posted 2001-02-25 02:26 PM

glorification of violence is against pip guidelines

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-02-25 03:17 PM

I actually prefer this to the original version.
You obviously had to be a bit more vague about what you were talking about, which made the reader have to work a bit harder.
All that I told you earlier still stands on this one, you did an excellent revision.
To the library, I say!
-Allan

The unintelligent are merely tools for the intelligent. That would make my house a veritable toolshed. ~~Allan Riverwood

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-02-25 08:25 PM

I liked the original i mean....I wouldnt change a poem just so it fits the guidelines for Passions.

Anyway, nice try
This is the PG rated poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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