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PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02

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0 posted 2002-07-25 06:16 PM

I hate myself for loving you,
You make me feel empty, untrue.
I hate the way you look at me,
Your eyes so real, and made of sea.
I hate the myself for needing you,
You make me feel like I need to redo.
I hate the way you smile at me,
Your face curls up…
You laugh at me.

I can't tell if it's a sneer,
or if you're happy to see me.

(When I touch and object, that you've touched, I feel you.So what would I feel if I touched you?)

"Without you, without you, everything falls apart.
Without you, It's not as much fun to pick up the peices." -NineInchNails

shadowchild458
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since 2002-07-10

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1 posted 2002-07-25 07:21 PM

i really liked this sara, but i don't think you should call it a letter to you since it's really not a letter. and what's with the thing at the bottom? that's just weird!

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

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2 posted 2002-07-25 07:24 PM

I thought the thing at the bottom was a little weird too.

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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3 posted 2002-07-25 07:30 PM

Lol.  Thanks Abby ... and white rose ... thanks I think.
SC, I'm really screwed up right now.
I was going to call it "Calvin" (that's who it's for) but I couldn't think of a name.
(do we keep missing each other on aim again)?
And the thing at the bottom ... well. This guy ... he's my brother's friend and they're in a band. The guy plays drums.
I found a drum stick (broken) which belonged to him ... and I had this weird sensation... I felt like he was there, and like I wasn't alone.  I felt him ... there with me, I guess.
And I wondered, right then, what'd it would feel like to be there with him, and actually feeling 'him.'  It's weird, and hard to explain, and I'm messed up right now, as I already said.  Thanks, though.

-Sara

"Without you, without you, everything falls apart.
Without you, It's not as much fun to pick up the peices." -NineInchNails

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

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4 posted 2002-07-25 07:36 PM

Sara, I did not mean it as a criticism in any way. The last thought just appeared disjointed from the rest of the piece. I got the message of the rest of it though :-)

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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5 posted 2002-07-25 07:39 PM

WhiteRose......

I guess... maybe... it wasn't really part of the poem.
Sometime i just felt like adding, maybe.
I'm not really sure... i'm a little confused.
That's sad isn't it!? I can't ever remember my own work... maybe i am insane.

Well, thanks.
_sara

"Without you, without you, everything falls apart.
Without you, It's not as much fun to pick up the peices." -NineInchNails

WhiteRose
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6 posted 2002-07-25 07:59 PM

Sara
Nope you are not insane. Insane people never think they are. So you're safe there. :-)

I understand how you feel. I've been there myself. I've written poetry over the years and gone back over it later and even I can't understand it. We all do it. This feeling of confusion will pass.

*HuGs*

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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7 posted 2002-07-25 08:03 PM

Thanks for the encouragement.

I hope to be reading more of you...
so keep posting.

Tries to hide emotion...
-sara

"Without you, without you, everything falls apart.
Without you, It's not as much fun to pick up the peices." -NineInchNails

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