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Deliverance |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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paper delicate wrapping up the blood and veins layers layering the skin take the ribbons satin spooled freedom in tissue are woven wrapping up the blood and veins eat and sew and reap again ribbons spooling my disdain of covering of truth. is mocking wrapping up the blood and veins lines of blue apparency pulsing quark of my sustained silences of you. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
You're a gift to Dark Poetry, m'lady. And by that, I mean both the forum and just dark poetry in general.  LOVE your use of repetition, visual formatting, and the stand-alone lines that cut up the flow like that... really cool... quote: Loved that part. You're quite the talented woman, Serenity, and we're really blessed to have you here. Blessed Be, Christ be with you, Namaste, Shalom, Buddha smiles and uh, Krishna gives ten thumbs up. 'Cause it's the intent that counts. Parasite Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are too patient with me. I was just experimenting with different devices here, but I appreciate your generous assessment. I think I just study form mostly to utilize the tools in my own way. You know ME, LP--gotta stretch those limits! Thank you m'friend. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey Karen  I was just browsing through some of the other forums and happened upon you. I'm glad I did. I'm becoming quite fond of the different forms of poetry and I liked the way you did this one. I liked the content and the form you wrote it with. Well, I've got to go to bed. I'm sleepy.  Hugs,  Ethel |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
now this is what I'm talking about..experiment all you like it still turns out bewitching...I feel like a groupie well without the well you know  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (05-25-2003 01:41 PM).] |
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ffpercent243 Junior Member
since 2003-05-04
Posts 37United Kingdom |
Love this poem, it has that magic quality to it. If I am silent, it is because I am thinking, if I do not talk, please do not think I am rude. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Hey witch! Didja notice that this has a "Shroud of Turin" thing goin' on as well? |
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RavenEye Junior Member
since 2003-05-02
Posts 29Ohio, USA |
Hi,  I like your poem. It flows very well. You have a great sense of imagery. Thanks for sharing this one. Bye, RavenEye |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
well done |
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