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Dark Poetry #3

Randomly Tossed Among Sharp Grains of Sand

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-08-10 12:30 PM

Random ranting,
the pulsation of time
trickling
down from
wrist to palm.

I know I promised not

..but seeds grown shade
and I
am lost.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2003-08-10 12:55 PM

It happens without warning. Nice poem.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill and roar like hell!

{Lord knows Im a VOODOO CHILD}-JIMI

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2003-08-10 03:29 PM

Brilliant l#ve the way you worded this

Lexia
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 111
Nowhere

3 posted 2003-08-12 09:13 PM

Very good write. I love the structure to this.

Lex

You may only be one person to the world, but you may also be the world to one person.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2003-08-15 12:21 PM

i'll find you, someway somehow...
"the pulsation of time
trickling
down from
wrist to palm."

so eleagantly(sp??) put, this was so beautiful, my words lack in comparison..adding this...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2003-08-16 10:47 PM

This is shockingly well done. It was like you slapped me in the face with your words. I'm sure this one will leave a mark. amazing..

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

6 posted 2003-08-17 08:27 AM

You have that silvery touch in your writing. Enjoyed.

mysticpoe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

7 posted 2003-08-17 10:05 PM

this is kind of eerie, and bleeds
real good stuff

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