Open Poetry #13 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738![]() |
He's convinced I'm beautiful He tells me that I am... He holds my head in wonderment within the span of loving hands... He kisses every finger-- somehow it's not too much- the way that his eyes linger, and gentle rough of touch. He's convinced I'm beautiful and now I think, "I am..." Now, I am inscrutable-- just a twitch within his hands. Everything, was naught before. Just because I'd not ask more. Unworthy I, to let love in? I challenged and collapsed within. Tell me I am beautiful. Tell me I am free. Tell me I am twice as nice-- rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... make me take the glasses off, surrender sunrise eyes surprise-- laughter in begin of love... You are beautiful. He said. As was he. She smiles instead. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 05-17-2001).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... Oh, me sista Oh my, I love these lines. You are beautiful my dear! Maree ![]() [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-17-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, Maree took the best lines of this weave and hung them here in response.... so I will say...this was great...and thanks for sharing! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He's convinced I'm beautiful He tells me that I am... He holds my head in wonderment within the span of loving hands... He kisses every finger-- somehow it's not too much- the way that his eyes linger, and gentle rough of touch. ================================ Tell me I am beautiful. Tell me I am free. Tell me I am twice as nice-- rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... make me take the glasses off, surrender sunrise eyes surprise-- laughter in begin of love... You are beautiful. He said. As was he. She smiles instead. ========================= Youre a butterfly poet ..of course yer beautiful ![]() and when ya rhyme ... YER GORGEOUS..EXQUISITE!!!!!!!!!! ![]() I LOVE this poem girl!! ![]() tis never easy being a moth, |
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rosepetals25![]()
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
serenity, "Tell me I am beautiful. Tell me I am free. Tell me I am twice as nice-- rest your head in hook of tree, find a lover in my eyes... make me take the glasses off, surrender sunrise eyes surprise-- laughter in begin of love..." I do believe that was my favorite part. ![]() ![]() TaraB |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
The poem is beautiful. I love it. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, This is wonderful I really enjoyed, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Serene One, this is most excellent... and by the way did you just get 6 ![]() ![]() ![]() Regards, Sudhir |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
this is ablsolutely breathtaking...nice to see the smiles in you ![]() |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sit back and enjoy. Well done. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
good to read something so uplifting from your pen!!!!! Kathleen Blake |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Fantastic write, serenity...every line is just brilliant! I love this one... sp ![]() to be with you... |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ I just love what you do! This is beautiful ![]() |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah....now this makes me smile. I like it very much!!! Congratulations on 6000!!! ![]() |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
congrats on the 6,000 my friend. . . and yes, you are beautiful. . . and so is this poem. . . ![]() --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
![]() twas too early this morn before me raspy tea, for me to notice your number... Congrats on 6000th toots ![]() (and ya was hoping to sneak by werent cha) ![]() tis never easy being a moth, |
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Cheryl Flemming Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 102 |
This is beautiful.The words really stay in your mind like that of a song. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Lovely poem,,,, congratulations on the milestone ![]() |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
very nice, liked a lot. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent piece. Enjoyed this very much. And congratulations on 6000! ![]() |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...the replies are almost as much fun as the inspiration ![]() |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
congrats on your 6000!!and this poem was wonderful...thanks for sharing and keep writing ![]() if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
There's beauty in everyone, and it feels so good to hear someone say it, isn't it. Thanks, Titia |
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Tough_Cookie Junior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 13USA |
You hold this beauty very nicely, and write it even better. Beautiful poem serenity! [This message has been edited by Tough_Cookie (edited 05-18-2001).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh yes. Beautiful indeed! To be told you're beautiful is a gift that is truly worth more than diamond or gold. You've done an excellent job in penning this piece girl! ![]() ~Sheri |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
yep... he's right.. you are hehe lovely!!! |
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