Open Poetry #13 |
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love-stone-me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
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missed you. In my dreams, last night I missed you-- in my dreams--blind-sight missing you in nuzzled chest-- I missed you-- I cannot find rest Missing you, I'll dream, pretend each time I miss? I'll shoot again.. a target centered thru the chest the place of heart where love not rest... and the quiver's knead of enter-- stone in sharp of love engendered... Too many years from now, there'll be.... an arrow sharpened love stone me. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful..how could it fall to the bottom..I will not let it if I can keep it upwards. ![]() We're sorry..this heart has been d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d. Should you like to hold the line we'll be glad to reconnect you.. |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Serenity, This flows beautifully. Your poetry always touches depths gently, like dipping in and out of thoughts. ![]()
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ You 'flow' gently through your thoughts. Squeezing your little 'heart' ! ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll dream, pretend each time I miss? I'll shoot again.. a target centered thru the chest the place of heart where love not rest... and the quiver's knead of enter-- stone in sharp of love engendered... Too many years from now, there'll be.... an arrow sharpened love stone me. ======================= yer so cool... ya know? this is deep me twin... yeppers....each time it leaves a scar... in your case... me thinks its a beauty mark ![]() ![]() It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"an arrow sharpened love stone me." what a concept, harpo.... geez.... this one's got rhythm and blues with a touch of hope despite the pain.... i dig it, girl! ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is excellent, serenity... I like the comparisons you've drawn... missing hurts! *S* |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oooh, good one my friend. Very nice images especially at the end. All writing comes |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Couldn't pick out one line if I tried...I loved them all! Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Lovely, moving piece, my friend jwesley |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
go get 'em Kathleen Blake |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
sort of like the "I wouldn't miss you if you would just hold still" theory... Wonderful title, serene one ![]() |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh girl...oh yeah do I ever know this feeling |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A most excellent write, my friend, O Serene One... Regards, Sudhir |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You are GOOD. You are VERY GOOD. As I've said repeatedly in various replies - those who write with brevity - write the best poetry. - This brief poem - communicated to me exceptionally well - It goes among my treasures! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Temptress...I thank you much, my friend! For the read and the compliment! Yer loveley! J? that was nice, I like the "dipping in and out of thoughts" thing---describes how I feel about writing perfectly. Thank you! ![]() Marge? lol...careful with that heart and how ya squeeze! It's held together with duct tape and superglue! (many times broken) Love ya lots...be well, and stay near! JM---I don't mind the scars so much...it's the growing of them that's painful! ![]() Hugs my friend! doreen? biddety bop sho wap alop a bam boom...and scooby doooby! (thought I'd reply in "scat" ![]() suthern? I thank you much. I admire your work much, and your replies mean a great deal to me! You are a gifted poet and a generous friend! LW...hey gal! How's "thangs?" Thanks for your consistently lovely attention...you are a sweetheart. JLR? Gratitude in abundance! I wasn't sure if I "translated"--nice, THANKS. jwesley? How are ya lovie? thanks for popping in, always a treat to hear from you...drop me an e, lemme know how things are going, will ya? Kath? Sometimes I think my "get up and go"? "GOT UP AND WENT..." But people like YOU, and all my good poet people rejuvenate me! Thanks doesn't quite cut it--but know I am ever grateful! Michael...I thank you much. I learn much from reading your work, and continue to study. Much gratitude. Paula...I know you know. Sorry about the other day...will be in touch. Forgive me, but somehow I think ya understand. Hugs and thanks. Sudhir? I just LOVE your spirit. You shine ON, my friend! Thanks you for stopping in to shine on ME! Wils? You touch my heart with your kindness. and this reply? I count among MY treasures. Much grat! Thanks to all, and hugs to forum...yer all too good to me! (but don't stop!) ![]() [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 04-03-2001).] |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yes, this is wonderful. And its so right on target, too. Love it. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This sure hits the bull's eye.... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Too many years from now, there'll be.... an arrow sharpened love stone me. I love it! girl. don't stop now, ya hear me? Maree ![]() |
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