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Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-04-05 09:40 AM

In tipped toed quiet
Little musings came to me
Soft-spun harmony

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-04-05 09:41 AM

Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

2 posted 2001-04-05 09:44 AM

on quite tip toe, I exit, quite clever,
loved it!

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2001-04-05 11:51 AM

YES!

I love it! Into my library this goes~

Take care,
Melissa~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-04-05 12:20 PM

This has such a gentle feel to it, just loved it! I don't think you need to 'past-tense' tipped as well as toed, I think tip-toed is more correct.

I hope I've said this in the same type of whisper with which you spoke your poem. Lovely.

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-04-05 12:25 PM

Lovely

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

6 posted 2001-04-05 12:30 PM

I loved the feel of this...so very delicate..quiet...perfect~

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

7 posted 2001-04-05 01:21 PM

Shhhhhhhhhhhhhh ...

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

8 posted 2001-04-05 01:29 PM

Lovely - simply lovely -

I am concieving a challenge - to "chain" these gems - each willing contributor - adding three 5-7-5 verses they percieve as appropriate - creating an "epic" Haiku - or senryu as they see serving to 'carry the thought on' -

What think you?

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

9 posted 2001-04-05 04:21 PM

shhhh i hear them say
nice senyru o yuh

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

10 posted 2001-04-24 11:11 AM

Lady in white,

this is awesome...into my library this goes!!

lunatic
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 172

11 posted 2001-04-25 03:19 PM

quiet all around
hush muse you clamor too much
silence is golden

Moonstruck

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