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Teen Poetry #5

Revenge

hoppy
Member

since 2000-01-27

Posts 271

0 posted 2001-12-22 02:49 AM

Revenge
Dance with the harper
Strum us a cord
we want to see
blood from the sword
Sing with the voice
sqeal out a note
those days have ended
you slit his throat

Time with the shrink
this time you'll kill
it's over your head
you miss it still

Drink with the man
time i revoke
i poisoned your brain
they call it a stroke

I dance with the harper
struming you a cord
i got to see
your blood on my sword

---Written by:Hoppy

5-25-00

i could be bounded in a nut shell and count myself king of infinite space

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

1 posted 2001-12-22 07:44 PM

This poem was amazing
Tho it made my heart hurt.
You really got to bring out the emotions with this one.
I admire that

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

2 posted 2001-12-22 07:57 PM

This was somewhat scary and morbid, but you wrote it quite well.

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-12-23 01:00 AM

I like this one!! Has a lotta feeling in it

nice job!!

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

4 posted 2001-12-23 02:52 AM

Yeah I really love this even if it's scary or morbid.Keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind

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