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Open Poetry #17

Erosion

Topheth
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 297
Texas

0 posted 2001-11-15 05:43 PM

Time, insistent,
subtle subduing
into linear living,
where Monday
follows Sunday,
when I,
wind-swept reed,
bend painfully back,
vainly grasping for roots,
watch helplessly
as the sands slip
from under me.
Another victim,
passionless annihilation,
erosion.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-11-15 05:47 PM

"watch helplessly
as the sands slip
from under me"

wow Jeph, this is a fantastic write.
I hope all is well for you

(((hugs)))

[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 11-15-2001).]

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

2 posted 2001-11-15 05:47 PM

This is great. I read it three times and each time saw a different vision. Very well done.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

3 posted 2001-11-16 09:22 AM

i freely admit, i am totally unable to read this poem without picturing Michael Whelan's painting by the same name, located here
a fine job, Topheth, with good images.
-Dave

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

4 posted 2001-11-16 08:15 PM

Enjoyed this very much...

~Tier

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2001-11-16 08:22 PM

Nice one Jeph! Enjoyed, Nancy.

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-11-16 09:52 PM

Wow, this is deep! Much enjoyed though.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2001-11-16 10:26 PM

Incredible imagery here. I can see those sands slipping, eroding the foundation of love. Hope this finds you well.

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