Open Poetry #18 |
![]() ![]() |
If God Should Take A Husband |
![]() ![]() ![]() |
Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL ![]() |
I sorted my needs into dreams and kept them boxed there in wait for you to make come true with understanding. This is the short of me combined with the length of my words and I know not what I say because sleep has taken over. I sorted my needs into dreams and now they died from your neglect. You said I could trust you with them but now they've passed on in your wake of naught. I am often still a girl because you cannot accept me as a woman yet. Your loss my control of my life but why can't you find that rhythm of honesty I have worked so hard to keep? Because the fear in your eyes has rotted into your soul and I fear you are beyond my help so may I give you over to the only one I trust, Sir? May I give you over to God in hopes that He can find your true path because the fear and scars in my own eyes has rotted into our love, Sir and I know that He will show you a different view and put me back on mine. For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. [This message has been edited by Temptress (02-13-2002 01:25 AM).] |
||
© Copyright 2002 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved | |||
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can certainly say, Jenn, that I read this title first one way, and by the end of your poem, another way... great title! Wonderful thoughts! |
||
Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() (sigh) So sad but beautiful, sweet friend, I hope now you have both found true happiness on your own and He has gifted you with joys and love! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing! ![]() ![]() May love and light alwyas shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
||
Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I have to go with Sunshine on this one. . . it's definitely a different way of looking at this. . . and, you do it, as always, with your usual depth and range of feeling and emotion. . . well done. . . ![]() ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
||
Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Your title grabbed my attention and your work grabbed my imagination! Well done! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
||
Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
That title is so tricky! I thought this would be about something totally different! Yet, I am no less satisfied by the actual meaning! Excellent poetry! Love, Bonnie |
||
Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Yes, Temptress, your title captured my attention. And your poem brilliantly captured my heart. I know that God would be delighted if many women would just throw Him their corrupted husbands and let Him fill their hearts with wonderful joys of a new start. It may seem unChristian to many but Christ sets us free, in Love! It's true! When we make a total release of all pain and sorrow and accept our freedom with Total Love in our hearts, all joy is waiting. It's something to talk with God about. ![]() -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher [This message has been edited by Silver Streak (02-13-2002 05:04 PM).] |
||
![]() ![]() |
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
![]() ![]() ![]() |
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. |