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rosepetals25

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0 posted 2002-03-02 04:53 PM

Hushed

A soft hushed whisper
The day’s end kissed by color
Of a setting sun

[This message has been edited by Auguste (03-07-2002 01:00 PM).]

Auguste

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By the sea

1 posted 2002-03-02 05:04 PM

pretty

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Mistletoe Angel

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2 posted 2002-03-02 05:17 PM

(smiles) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, the image and your gorgeous words are both soooooooo breathtaking! (kiss on cheek) Hey, how do you put pictures up with poems, I want to learn how to do that! (giggles) We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tara, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Magnus

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3 posted 2002-03-02 05:29 PM

Excellent choice of words to go with this
beautiful sunset...Nice Tara...

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2002-03-02 05:50 PM

Wow Tara~

This is just so peaceful....beautiful picture too....

Lauren~

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

Kethry
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5 posted 2002-03-02 05:55 PM

They say a picture is worth a thousand words in this case it is not true. The image is held in the words.
Beautifully done rosepetals
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Nan

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6 posted 2002-03-02 06:04 PM

Nice one...

Titia Geertman
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7 posted 2002-03-02 06:30 PM

WOW I bet you knew I would love this.

Great haiku and great pic.

Titia

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ecrivan
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my own state

8 posted 2002-03-02 07:49 PM

some days whisper better than others

nice one,

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

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9 posted 2002-03-03 12:52 PM

i concur.
this picture's worth 12 words, counting articles.
beautiful, dear.
-Dave

vandana

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10 posted 2002-03-03 05:24 PM

liked it

rosepetals25

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11 posted 2002-03-03 05:30 PM

Michael - Thank you

Noah - Thanks for reading!

Barry - I loveeeeee sunsets, always have.Thank you for stopping by.

Lauren - That is what I thought when I seen the picture, tranquil. Thanks for reading.

Kethry - Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyedit.

Nan - Well thanks

ecrivan - Very true.

Dave - Thank you

vandana - I'm glad

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

12 posted 2002-03-04 09:07 PM

Beautiful picture, and words a perfect match.
Sandra

jwesley
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13 posted 2002-03-05 09:00 AM

Hey, I agree with moon...well done.

jwesley

kaile

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14 posted 2002-03-07 11:36 AM

Ssssshhhhh

Nice work here

Honeybee
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15 posted 2002-03-07 11:52 AM

Tara, this is gorgeous!

It's a keeper!

One thing though....the first line has only 4 syllables when it should be 5
and the second line has only 6 syllables when it should be 7.
This haiku is far too beautiful to leave it with minor mistakes

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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Deep in the heart

16 posted 2002-03-07 12:30 PM

I love it!

Startime
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17 posted 2002-03-07 01:51 PM

This is absolute stunning...I love it...Beautiful...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

rosepetals25

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18 posted 2002-03-07 02:11 PM

Karen - Thank you

I'm glad you enjoyed.

And just a note, I did fix the syllable thing. Thank you Melissa for pointing it out.. I don't talk right

LOL. I swore hushed and kissed had 2 syllables.. but.. I was wrong *chuckles*

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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