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On A Whim (For Sean)
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On A Whim (For Sean) |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon 
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large shimmering puffs of gray rapidly traveling across early morning sky a dark stale shade of blue its backdrop for a few sparse pinhole stars twinkling i wish i could fly i would call you up and take you there we could look down on this world and smile i just wanna see you smile |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Great except for the wanna...that is true cringe material... the rest? I liked...  K |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Talia: i wish i could fly i would call you up and take you there we could look down on this world and smile i just wanna see you smile Fly on my wind . . . I loved this . . . just to see you smile nice xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-13-2003 12:44 AM).] |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon |
didn't mean to make u cringe Severn! hehe lol with the help of everyone i(...lol that includes capitalizing my "i"s as well) can change my ways! hehe |
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