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Dominoe Effect
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Dominoe Effect |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Who was first to pull the string at the center where we knitted together cosily with common dreams & fantasies? Who first noticed the imperfection marring the beauty of our always & never? thus changing us forever was it me who summoned the tempest that left us breathless, scattered & holding on as though it mattered to what litte was left of our tapestry? such a tragedy 'cause what might have been was lost almost as soon as we began, so answer then this... if the pull of a tiny string can began such a damaging event of things, could the merging of our lips restore my heart's dearest wish? Sunkissed. "I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunkissed Perhaps, enjoyed the read. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
maybe, just maybe... great piece! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
trips nicely down the page and thoughts of what if..... I enjoyed |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'such a tragedy 'cause what might have been was lost almost as soon as we began, so answer then this... if the pull of a tiny string can began such a damaging event of things, could the merging of our lips restore my heart's dearest wish?' Most days I find myself wondering the same. Liked this alot...nice to meet you. Love dominoe themes...  |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Thank you Seymour, Passing Shadows, & Captain. Duncan, you know me. We're twins, remember? *chuckles* Sunkissed. "I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Poingently beautiful. Eric |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Wonderful and expressive presentation of both images and feelings left by the unraveling. Nicely said and done Sunkissed! *enjoyed this much* |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Thank you Eric, nice of you to say! Thank you Blues, I appreciate your comment and thoughts.  Sunkissed."I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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