| Teen Poetry #6 |
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Shooting Star |
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Trouble Breathing Member
since 2002-11-12
Posts 63 |
A star burns brightly, During the day, Brighter by night, Watching as your dreams take flight Everything you wished for in a nutshell, Waking up to the morning and the smell, Of the winter covered ground, And the birds that are nowhere to be found That is all I have for it so far. I like it, heh. Should I add more or is it good as is? |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
That was good, short but sweet. I think it is good as it is, but it would probably be good if you added more too. Either way. WinterWren |
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