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Teen Poetry #6

HE WALKED BY!!!

Chloey
Member

since 2002-09-29

Posts 74
in a silver mustang convertible

0 posted 2002-10-04 07:45 AM

I see you over by the counter
i know your looking at me
But i dont make the first move
you guys have to come to me

i know you like me
you cant stop starring
you keep flashing me
with that beautiful smile

I see you coming over
making your move right
passed me to the gurl
on the next stool

You broke my heart in two

You can fall from the sky,
You can fall from a tree,but,
The best way to fall is in love with me

Chloey
Member

since 2002-09-29

Posts 74
in a silver mustang convertible

1 posted 2002-10-04 08:20 AM

wow after reading through this i can majorly see it is NOT my best work!!

*$*Chloey*$*

You can fall from the sky,
You can fall from a tree,but,
The best way to fall is in love with me

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-10-04 10:58 AM

Don't be so hard on yourself, Chloey.

This is cute... don't you just hate it when that happens?  Always a downer... hehe...

I think the title gives away the ending.  Maybe you should consider changing it.

See you around.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

3 posted 2002-10-04 12:27 PM

Ouch, that's rough.
Cute piece.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

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