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Teen Poetry #6

Sunset

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

0 posted 2003-04-05 09:45 AM

I watch the sunset out across the sea
I only wish that you were here
With your loving arms around me
I feel so cold, even when it's warm
I'm so lost and cannot see
I'm not sure you will ever come
Here, to comfort me.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

snoduck
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since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

1 posted 2003-04-05 04:47 PM

It's short, but a great poem. You put a lot of thought into it, and a lot of feeling. very nice.

-Erica-

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2003-04-05 10:08 PM

I agree, in a few simple words, you manage to convey the primordial longing to belong.

Enjoyed much.

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-04-08 02:51 PM

Thanks for your replies, they mean a lot to me

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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