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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-04-25 06:45 AM

I take a look around
and I see you standing there
pain flashes inside me
It still hurts to see you.

So I close my eyes
So I won't have to
See you
So I won't have to
Feel you
....anymore....

The love that was
once in your eyes
has now turned to coldness
I see it and it still hurts to watch.

So I close my eyes
So I won't have to
See you
So I won't have to
feel you
....anymore....

This once was something great
now its just a tragedy
a story of a love that was broken
and it still hurts to feel it.

So I close my eyes
So I won't have to
See you
So I won't have to
Feel you
....Anymore....
....Anymore....
!ANYMORE!

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-04-25 10:05 AM

I like this, it was really good. For some reason I could see this as a song, I dunno why. Haha! Anyways, I like I like!! ~Jess

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

2 posted 2003-04-25 11:38 AM

I like it too... it has a really nice feel.

And it really does seem like a song.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-04-26 09:24 PM

I really like this one, Stac. Really nice write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2003-04-26 10:12 PM

Thanks, it was actually meant to be a song..maybe not very good, but o well. Your replies are appreciated. Thanks again.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2003-04-27 12:13 PM

I really really love this one!!
It flowed perfectly, I like the way the 2nd stanza repeated.
And I think the 5th stanza is my favorite!
I can relate to this one very well,
Excellent poem!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

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