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Teen Poetry #6

Crossroads

Fariegirl
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 147

0 posted 2003-06-03 11:19 AM

I am here,
At a crossroad,
Do I choose to help a friend,
Or to keep my life good,
I think she will be fine,
But she says I need to help,
She says nothing bad will happen,
I think something will,
She calls me selfish,
What do I do,
At a crossroad,
I am here.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

1 posted 2003-06-03 12:19 PM

Kat,
hey, this is great, and you described ur sitch perfectly. i loved the referance, you did very well on this.....

riley leanne

*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time*

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2003-06-03 12:45 PM

Hmm... I liked the way you formatted this poem with beginning and ending with the same sentence. However, the ending doesn't read right... maybe you'd want to take a look at that again.

Other than that, I like this poem. Short and sweet, expressing the predicament and leaving the reader wanting to know more. I enjoyed this. Keep writing... I can't wait to read more.

--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

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