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Gone Is My World
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Gone Is My World |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
Gone Is My World As I slip further into my world I realize that I like it more Reality is a drag I just want to dream No more hurt Just happiness This world I’m in is great You always see a smile Everything is perfect Everyone loves me I am popular My best friend is still alive I think I’ll stay here Forget reality No more hurt for me Good-bye world I’m gonna live in Gone i am in trouble but no one knows it if you can figure out my messages thenhelp me. |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
not as good as my others but youll get the drift i am in trouble but no one knows it if you can figure out my messages thenhelp me. |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
you can't live in gone, sweeety, because if you do that, we're not going to be able to help.... gone is a world of one. we need you to continue talking to us, ok? its a good poem though... kinda quick... l can feel the pain... luv ya, laurie. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpiritRider~ Welcome to Passions. I'll keep an eye out for your pieces. Enjoy the many rooms of poetry here~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Dreaming can, indeed, be an awesome escape! This is a wonderful piece, and proves to be quite true. Thanks for sharing this piece! Looking forward to more... --Marie "You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life) |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
hope to read all you stuff. ill keep my eyes open for you guys. thanks. later days i am in trouble but no one knows it if you can figure out my messages thenhelp me. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
The last line was awesome! I absolutely LOVED it!!  Dreaming is a good escape from reality...but remember it's not real and later on you'll find yourself feeling worse than before. At least in my eyes...Hopefully better days will come your way!  Good work! ~Jess  "If a thing is worth doing at all, it is worth doing badly." -Gustav Holst |
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