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Teen Poetry #6

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morgansmiles
Junior Member

since 2003-06-11

Posts 25
hicksville

0 posted 2003-06-18 05:22 PM

Look at this mess
Once again I’m digging
Digging a hole of troubles
And the hole never ends

I’m leading you on
Just to show you the end
And no matter how much I try
I will never change

Won’t someone please help me
I want to stop this digging
Put an end to this game
But my hole just keeps getting bigger

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

1 posted 2003-06-18 05:32 PM

I really like the beginning, I think it ended kind of abrubtly, but if you revised it and added to it I think this would be a very good poem. Nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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