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Teen Poetry #6

Skyfire (challenge 2)

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

0 posted 2002-11-02 04:22 AM

She leads on the world
Knowing that no one will notice
Yellow coloured mums
Falling into the mud;
In hopes that someone will
Realise she does have
Emotions and does love... certain people

*~* Bleh... not my best, certainly, but it holds meaning for me, even if no one else gets it

Surreal
Junior Member

since 2002-10-21

Posts 35
Paris

1 posted 2002-11-02 07:46 AM

Love that last line. Poems with good endings are always my favorites.

Glory is a silent thing-- Mineral

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2002-11-02 03:24 PM

I get it...every word of it.
You've put your heart into this and it shows.
Love it, Rhonda.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2002-11-03 04:38 PM

Hmm I really love this, it is extremely well written and I enjoyed reading every single word, thank you for sharing it with us

Andrew

Tamma

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since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

4 posted 2002-11-03 07:18 PM

I really liked this one, too... Heh...you rpic kinda looks like someone i went to school with...

Much Luv,
Tamma

Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

5 posted 2002-11-04 03:55 PM

I also felt this was above par, Skyfire. You worked well within your restriction and still kept it creative and interesting.

Very good answer to the challenge.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2002-11-05 03:14 PM

*decides this needs to be up with the rest
of the challenge responses*
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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