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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
I’m left alone Crying out loud in to gutter No one sees me in the mist As I crawl my way onto the walk The crowds take no notice Kicking me along where way I make my way to my knees Rain beating down on my head Bleeding into my soul I am forsaken |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
interesting. it reminds me of a friend's style, kinda fast paced and rushed. l like. laurie. |
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Kaydo Junior Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 17Washington, USA |
Though it doesn't quite flow it gets the point a cross. A short read yes, but i had to read it a few times to get a better understading of it. I like it. Keep writing. Good job! Work like you don't need the moeny, dance like no one is watching, and love like you've never been hurt. |
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