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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-05-15 03:32 AM

Concrete

things have clung
to me
as ivied skin
placed upon the grit
where grains fly
in the desert
of time
behind I leave
the bones
of things
dead
but not forgotten
and maybe later
if I again
try to get
my feet wet
a speck
may stay
in grip
as cement

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2003-05-15 07:18 AM

Life is all about getting our feet wet, isn't it? A little concrete is a good thing - Just don't step tooooooooo deeply... Well penned, slick...

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

2 posted 2003-05-15 08:23 AM

So descriptive and deep.
This talks to the deepest part of the reader.
Eric

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2003-05-15 12:21 PM

what do we create in concrete? makes me wonder. . .

excellent work helen. . .

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one_thought
Junior Member

since 2003-04-03

Posts 23
just a state of mind

4 posted 2003-05-15 02:22 PM

Nice write
nice read also

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

5 posted 2003-05-15 02:27 PM

nice bit o writing

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2003-05-15 08:30 PM

Definitely a nice write, but more than that is the depths to which it takes one...
j.

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

7 posted 2003-05-15 11:29 PM

Dang girl! You can write! This is poignant and you used an excellent theme to bring home your thoughts. I'm keeping this one too

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Second Self
Junior Member

since 2003-05-15

Posts 15

8 posted 2003-05-15 11:34 PM

Very nice. Flows flawless without punctuation.

"www.miserymadebeautiful.com"

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

9 posted 2003-05-16 12:33 PM

another concrete write!!!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

10 posted 2003-05-16 01:31 AM

Slick loads up another arrow, drills another bullseye.....Well done!

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passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2003-05-16 05:10 AM

I'm proud to know you

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