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Open Poetry #27

The Waterfall...

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-06-14 10:29 AM

Cacaphony screams stream's riff
as it free falls over cliff
quashing nature's quiet
in a kind of liquid riot
incessant in its pour
how it drops in pounding roar
from the heights of flat plateau
to the canyon far below
from a gentle flowing river
to the crush of cliff's deliver
down into the chasm
in a kind of liquid spasm
quashing nature's quiet
in a kind of liquid riot
in a crushing, rushing roar
to the pound of river's pour
to the sound of river's war
to a canyon time has wore
to worn rocks far down below
from free fall from flat plateau
from the river's waterfall
from free fall of water's fall.

[This message has been edited by Tim (06-14-2003 10:32 AM).]

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

1 posted 2003-06-14 10:32 AM

Hey, Tim - Not bad at all. Very consistent and visual. I like it. Have you thought about writing a kitty kicker poem?

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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2 posted 2003-06-14 02:29 PM

no kitty-kicking here buddy! lol

good write

gyiel marlok
Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 145
OHIO

3 posted 2003-06-14 02:56 PM

COOL VISUALS

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-07-18 01:07 AM

Tim...wow..I love the rhythm of this one...it's like a chant.
Very cool write, my friend.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"it is better to be a part of beauty
for one instant and then cease to
exist than to exist forever
and never be a part of beauty"
-- Don Marquis

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