Take My Heart.. - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #28

Take My Heart..

exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2003-09-03 10:56 PM

cut my chest open
rip my heart out
kill it
i dont need it anymore
i dont need you anymore
you can take it with you
all it does is slow me down
bring me down
i dont need it
or any other emotions
people just use them
use me
i dont need that kinda pain anymore
i need to breathe
to fly
i cant when you knock the wind out me me
my heart crys everytime you walk by
i stop breathing
you need to take my heart away
that way i can never get hurt again...

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

1 posted 2003-09-03 10:59 PM

exhale, this is a very powerful poem,
The emotions really come out,
Just remember the heart promotes the inspiration, so I would keep it if I were you.

cuda04
Junior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 46
Wisconsin,USA

2 posted 2003-09-03 11:01 PM

I would keep an eye on typos, but the raw emotion is very powerful, keep up the great work!

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.