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Open Poetry #30

Hawaiian Rhapsody

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2003-12-18 11:52 PM

Hawaiian Rhapsody

As I approached the fork
in the trail I saw her
standing there among the
exotic flora and fauna.
She asked me which was
the preferred trail and
I told her it would be
the one that she was taking.
Her lips formed a perfect smile
and she said "Come with me,
I know a place in a valley below
where palm trees sway and
silky streams flow."
She took my hand,
she led me there,
Hawaiian Rhapsody,
in heart we shared.

JamesLee
December18
2003

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2003-12-19 12:27 PM

Nice poem. I wish I could find a place like that.

GIS

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Laney
Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 85
Illinois

2 posted 2003-12-19 02:16 AM

I love this. A haven from "life" is what every person needs. Your poem depicted an exotic release totally from the norm. Good write!
--Alana

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2003-12-19 06:56 AM

Beautifully written, felt and expressed!

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

4 posted 2003-12-19 10:57 AM

Very nice and beautifuly flowing.

Eric

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2003-12-19 01:55 PM

Could visualize this well. Hawaii sounds pretty good this time of year -- and so did your post! .......BEEEEEwell.

jaicie114
Senior Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 750
On the edge of forever

6 posted 2003-12-19 10:32 PM

Great write, James!

Glad you're finding some respite!

Love and Light...jc

This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light.

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