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Open Poetry #30

In Deep Snow

the ant
Junior Member

since 2003-11-30

Posts 18
ca, usa

0 posted 2003-12-02 03:46 AM

I feel cold
In this deep snow
white all around
bloodshed on the ground

and to this day
I could see the chill
the air razor thin
mirrors back
a time I had once been

I drew an arrow from the bobsled
the ice turned red
crying
on my face
dead

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-12-02 07:48 AM

nice

Masked Intruder

Moderator

Senior Member

since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

2 posted 2003-12-02 08:29 PM

Okay, first, I have to explain the image I formed just by seeing the title of the poem and your user name.

The Ant in Deep Snow.

Yeah, that was a killer.  Now I'm going to read the poem...

I don't understand the images in the first and third stanza.  I picture didn't form completely enough for me to figure out what was going on.  The second, descriptive stanza, was very well written.  Its imagery was good.

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