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Yoinn
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since 2007-08-16
Posts 649
Michigan
0 posted 2008-03-29 06:00 PM


Stepping Up

I know very little.
I “feel” way too much.
I stand up everyday,
It’s all I know how to do.

I will put
one foot in front
of the other
until I fall.

It’s all I know how to do.

Yoin
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hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
Posts 514
at the beach... i wish
1 posted 2008-04-04 12:56 PM

great write i think every ine can feel like this

JJ
Reborn
Junior Member
since 2008-04-01
Posts 13
2 posted 2008-04-11 08:08 PM

Your poems are too short man. They are good poems but if feels like they cut off before they really get started.
Yoinn
Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649
Michigan
3 posted 2008-04-11 09:29 PM

You are very right. I have done a rewrite on this one because i noticed the very same thing. rushed this one to post to early.
thanks for the help

Yoin
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