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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Watching I am watching and there is white closing in at the edges now so fast so soon and by the time you and flecks of some color bluered watching I watch how so fast time you read this white closing cold like snow in the dark by the seeing smaller it is details tiny blue redblack tiny read this I white like cold andgreen how how is there green I wil can’t not expect green is closing how |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The first couple of reads through this, I felt as though I was in free fall... but maybe I just stepped onto the Tilt-a-Whirl where the colors swirl more with every spin. This is breathtaking... and edgy... and absolutely excellent! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie...When I first read this, I thought of the sky...and then I thought of the colors I see when I close my eyes. A very interesting ride with you...a little scary but still the color imagery was beautiful. |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very magical, and full of color, it's like looking into a kaleidoscope |
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Shereen Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 57Michigan, USA |
I too, felt the "free fall"... Great ride. Shereen. |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
I found it frightening in a way.. It had this amazing effect that I have never experienced before. The fact that it's so powerful without being over-descriptive kind of struck me as frightening too. Whoa. It's great. Amazing stuff. |
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