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Teen Poetry #7

emotions

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since 2004-04-11

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0 posted 2004-05-03 04:00 PM

*My emotions are taking me for a wild rollercoaster ride*
I love you
I hate you
I want you
to die.
I dont't know how you really feel
sitting aside
of me
wow...
I really want you
to kiss me.

blackandwhitehorizon
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since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

1 posted 2004-05-04 06:26 PM

i like this, it flows nicely

...except for the last two lines just kind of... idk, don't really flow as well as the rest. i mean i love the idea, i like the lines, but maybe if you reworded them it would work nicely... it's a good poem though

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since 2004-04-11

Posts 86

2 posted 2004-05-04 09:25 PM

Thanks... yeah, I see your point. It's just something I was feeling the one night when I wrote that poem. I wrote this poem about someone I really like, but kinda hate at the same time. love sucks :p Thanks for you help!

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

3 posted 2004-05-04 10:29 PM

wow intersting ......i loved it .......excellent.....lovezz

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